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rebelscum's picture
rebelscum
Activity Score 2110

Give Pigs A Chance :)

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I saw a subliminal ad executive once, but only for a second.

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I have thousands of pencils and $1.50 so I'm off to Starbucks

LimitedTimeOffer's picture
LimitedTimeOffer
Activity Score 200

Good job and great cause. I might have suggested a slightly more generic/less striking shoe brand given the ad isn't about his clothes ;)

vurtomatic's picture
vurtomatic
Activity Score 364

Don't get the point of
"I won this space in a competition"

rebelscum's picture
rebelscum
Activity Score 2110

...could it be that he won the space in a competition?

Too on-the-nose?

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I saw a subliminal ad executive once, but only for a second.

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I have thousands of pencils and $1.50 so I'm off to Starbucks

EGGO's picture
EGGO
Activity Score 354

Throw away everything but the second paragraph. There's your headline, but I think it could be played with even more to sound better and smarter. The rest of the stuff around that sounds like BS.

You have to hate advertising in order to truly love it.

Chough's picture
Chough
Activity Score 147

I like it. The "I won this space" bit works… the whole ad is about space. And the long copy? Great. You're either waiting for a bus, or sat in your car waiting for the bloody bus to pull out. So you need something to read. Agree about the shoes though!

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A.G. Pennypacker
Activity Score 607

What's with all the shoe comments? Who gives a rats a*s? I didn't notice them or find them distracting at all. But what I did notice is this is a bad ad.

krautland's picture
krautland
Activity Score 3216

what she said.

and someone please explain the "I won this space" line to me.
that's there why...?

teenie's picture
teenie
Activity Score 1894

The message has been hijacked by the means. Bad, bad, bad strategy. Original, perhaps. Effective? I highly doubt it. You've alienated 90% of your readers off the bat.

doworkson's picture
doworkson
Activity Score 242

BAD, boring writing. try again. who the fuck cares if you won that space in a competition? and clearly the space was plenty big enough cuz you've got that boring headline that has absolutely zero to do with the point of the ad in that huge font.

even "Give Pigs Some Space." would be a cooler headline.

teenie's picture
teenie
Activity Score 1894

Or "Pigs in space!!!!!"

rebelscum's picture
rebelscum
Activity Score 2110

Give Pigs A Chance :)

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I saw a subliminal ad executive once, but only for a second.

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I have thousands of pencils and $1.50 so I'm off to Starbucks

Tripioso's picture
Tripioso
Activity Score 470

I think you have the time to keep busy at reading, while you wait or your bus. It is fine to me.

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