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Expert's picture
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Reasonable execution of a good idea. If you want an Apple iphone you'll read it and that's precisely who it's directed at. Copy is good enough. For all those tools out there who will try to tell you it won't get read because of all the copy (what, 200 words?) or that it could be just as easily produced with a pithy headline I would say you miss the point. Write a headline with a little copy and you write an ad. This is different. This is why it is good.

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cocochiller
Activity Score 146

I love the idea, and feel like the copy is almost there. The part where there is conjecture about the price of the apples and when it was announced people were shocked and there was a public outcry though? It gets me lost. I'm guessing the apples were priced too high but you don't say that.

Plus the copy is sooo long so the art direction should entice you to read it but it does the opposite.

Overall I like it okay.

Kingo's picture
Kingo
Activity Score 11

nobody cares about full page copy.
especially like this.
the only people that will actually read itAre not the target.

natt1's picture
natt1
Activity Score 44

Good idea, copy well written apart from the price issue and the people protesting. This could send a different message to whoever reads it.

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yesprabhakar
Activity Score 72

Prabhakar Soma

Its nice to see a copy based ad after such a long time...It's GOOD !

stitchy's picture
stitchy
Activity Score 779

how many times do u need 2 repeat the word APPLES!!!
they need more IQ i guess!!!

TexasH's picture
TexasH
Activity Score 365

Well, this repetition is very funny. A wording way to show the omnipresence of "apples".

askon's picture
askon
Activity Score 433

Now I understand why there was a young creative walking around the office playing a ukulele... Nut HOUSE!

-- 9 out of 10 dentists agree that most people will believe any statistic you throw at them.

Johnny Boy's picture
Johnny Boy
Activity Score 14

I like the IDEA behind the ad. Apples as an analogy to the iPhone. I myself prefer oranges to apples, but I dont make that connection with an LG model phone from this ad. The art direction seems lazy to me, if this is a fairy tale, make it LOOK like one. Open up old children fairy tales and look at the ornamental decorations, and colours, and knights and maidens, and elves tooting long horns that extend down the page, etc. The beginning 'O' graphic has the right idea. Its long copy, so it should really draw the reader in. Also, the tone of voice doesnt suit the story or the 'look'. Theres a fairy tale rythm thats just missing from the writing. It doesnt feel authentic. And I know the client would never let you fuck with the logo, but maybe have the logo over some kind of wax seal or something medieval so it looks more authentic and less like an ad.
But thats just my honest critique, the IDEA is solid.

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picktokyo
Activity Score 1404

scam. and not funny. utterly awful

Frits Harkema's picture
Frits Harkema
Activity Score 713

I prefer apple. Anyhow.

justsayin's picture
justsayin
Activity Score 225

I read it all, waiting for the exciting twist, in the end... it didn't happen. nice idea, boring execution... cut the copy in half, change the art direction, change the ad, change the client and the agency, and we have a winner! god, the monday hangover!

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doworkson
Activity Score 242

boring as fuck. no one is going to read this dribble. you could make the same statement and get the same message across a lot faster and more powerful with one solid headline.

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STRTLRS
Activity Score 1601

A fifth grader wrote this. The ornate drop cap alone doesn't say old-timey... Could have been better.

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rodrigoplant
Activity Score 53

yes, and my choice is still an iphone.

david.g's picture
david.g
Activity Score 68

the apple for Apple is first idea to me.
the little story is not so boring but not interesting enough to make a good ad.

sneakyhands's picture
sneakyhands
Activity Score 1857

you lost me at bad taste in their mouths. not the actual copy, but about halfway through the ad. here's a thought: write as if it was a voice over for a :30 TV. basically try to end it before i realize that it's running on.

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Absolut M
Activity Score 1069

good idea

+8

Absolut M's picture
Absolut M
Activity Score 1069

good idea

+8

Expert's picture
Expert

Reasonable execution of a good idea. If you want an Apple iphone you'll read it and that's precisely who it's directed at. Copy is good enough. For all those tools out there who will try to tell you it won't get read because of all the copy (what, 200 words?) or that it could be just as easily produced with a pithy headline I would say you miss the point. Write a headline with a little copy and you write an ad. This is different. This is why it is good.

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