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mtneylonTuesday, May 10, 2011 - 14:00

Well isn't that just clever. Jack Johnson uses this same flow technique in many of his songs.

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Jaap GrollemanTuesday, May 10, 2011 - 14:19

Yeah it's clever indeed, I'm not fully convinced though - but it's nice :)

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createwittyTuesday, May 10, 2011 - 16:19

i was abt to skip this one considering d length of d copy...who has all d time in d world to go thru all dat copy...a visual wud hav been much better...although d copy/flow technique is brilliant in itself..

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daviddrogaTuesday, May 10, 2011 - 22:00

Great!

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Bob.CTuesday, May 10, 2011 - 22:12

Long copy is wonderful and this is very clever (although trying far too hard in many places),it's creative, and the concept does get the point across
But 60 years ago Powershift would have been sold with a long flowing poem, this is the modern equivalent - to be honest it's probably just as effective
Maybe if it was shorter (not 34 lines) and possibly about cars it would be very convincing, now i'm not sure how many will hang around long enough to get the point

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A. AkbariWednesday, May 11, 2011 - 01:19

Looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooong Copy!
Nobody take its time to read such copy!

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Jaap GrollemanWednesday, May 11, 2011 - 03:47

Doesn't matter, it still gives you the message.

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rakhalWednesday, May 11, 2011 - 03:29

what is this? no time to read loooooooooooooooong copy!

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ace85leWednesday, May 11, 2011 - 04:12

Sorry no time. Next.

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KriativityWednesday, May 11, 2011 - 04:27

Come on..who approved this and why?!

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atb2005Wednesday, May 11, 2011 - 07:31

Clever or not, it's tediously long..

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flurlThursday, June 2, 2011 - 14:47

Read: "didn't even bother reading the first line but i'm gonna give it a 1/10 based on what i predict it will be"

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welsh523Wednesday, May 11, 2011 - 09:15

Am I the only one who notices that the punctuation could use a once-over? That messed up the flow for me before I could get a third of the way through this one. That being said, I've see it before. It's not all that clever but, it's not all that bad either.