13 comments

LimitedTimeOffer's picture
LimitedTimeOffer
200 pencils

Good job and great cause. I might have suggested a slightly more generic/less striking shoe brand given the ad isn't about his clothes ;)

vurtomatic's picture
vurtomatic
364 pencils

Don't get the point of
"I won this space in a competition"

rebelscum's picture
rebelscum
2114 pencils

...could it be that he won the space in a competition?

Too on-the-nose?

____________________________________________________________

I saw a subliminal ad executive once, but only for a second.

____________________________________________________________

I have thousands of pencils and $1.50 so I'm off to Starbucks

EGGO's picture
EGGO
354 pencils

Throw away everything but the second paragraph. There's your headline, but I think it could be played with even more to sound better and smarter. The rest of the stuff around that sounds like BS.

You have to hate advertising in order to truly love it.

Chough's picture
Chough
147 pencils

I like it. The "I won this space" bit works… the whole ad is about space. And the long copy? Great. You're either waiting for a bus, or sat in your car waiting for the bloody bus to pull out. So you need something to read. Agree about the shoes though!

A.G. Pennypacker's picture
A.G. Pennypacker
607 pencils

What's with all the shoe comments? Who gives a rats a*s? I didn't notice them or find them distracting at all. But what I did notice is this is a bad ad.

krautland's picture
krautland
3225 pencils

what she said.

and someone please explain the "I won this space" line to me.
that's there why...?

teenie's picture
teenie
1894 pencils

The message has been hijacked by the means. Bad, bad, bad strategy. Original, perhaps. Effective? I highly doubt it. You've alienated 90% of your readers off the bat.

doworkson's picture
doworkson
242 pencils

BAD, boring writing. try again. who the fuck cares if you won that space in a competition? and clearly the space was plenty big enough cuz you've got that boring headline that has absolutely zero to do with the point of the ad in that huge font.

even "Give Pigs Some Space." would be a cooler headline.

teenie's picture
teenie
1894 pencils

Or "Pigs in space!!!!!"

rebelscum's picture
rebelscum
2114 pencils

Give Pigs A Chance :)

____________________________________________________________

I saw a subliminal ad executive once, but only for a second.

____________________________________________________________

I have thousands of pencils and $1.50 so I'm off to Starbucks

Tripioso's picture
Tripioso
470 pencils

I think you have the time to keep busy at reading, while you wait or your bus. It is fine to me.

Life's a Trip. Enjoy the Ride!

Log in or register to post comments