RSPCA Summer Appeal: Towel

Advertising Agency: M&C Saatchi, Melbourne, Australia
Creative Director: Steve Crawford
Creatives: Murray Bransgrove, Sandra Galiazzo, Doogie Chapman

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16 comments

sumsum's picture
sumsum
615 pencils

to communicate water shortage with a towel is ok. but the line tooo constructed and the credibility suffers from that. another idea may work better.

Jet Propulsion Lab's picture
Jet Propulsion Lab
10683 pencils

I've never heard someone say the line is "too constructed" when critiquing an ad. What does that mean exactly? And the credibility suffers because of how the headline is written right now?
This is one of those ads that makes a brutally clear case about the issue at hand and tells it in a very direct but creative way.

I see the visual, I read the headline, I understand the message and I might even be compelled to act in response (by calling the number provided.) That, my friend, is the true definition of a well-"constructed" advertising.

sloppy4's picture
sloppy4
1496 pencils

the headline does feel constructed. it doesn't flow or sound like something a person would say.

Jet Propulsion Lab's picture
Jet Propulsion Lab
10683 pencils

Not every headline has to be written in a colloquial form. The line here is simply "stating" the problem. And it feels very appropriate to the subject matter the way it's written. You don't need to water it down by making it sound "street" so people may digest the message a little easier.

But my main beef about your comment is when you said the headline "doesn't flow." So, lemme ask. Which part of the headline feels so disjointed that it eludes your comprehension of it?

That said, it would've been grammatically correct if they'd said ".... many Victorian animals will this summer." But hey, last time I checked, we're in goddamn ADVERTISING!

sloppy4's picture
sloppy4
1496 pencils

it's friday jpl. have a smoke.

re: the ad. you don't find saying "on this tea towel" the least bit clunky?

Jet Propulsion Lab's picture
Jet Propulsion Lab
10683 pencils

Dude, I quit.

To be honest, I don't know what a tea towel is. (I'm guessing it's the same as a "dish cloth?") We definitely don't drink a lot of teas over here, do we? I but I guess (for the purpose of the ad) it's much better than using a bath towel or beach towel. Because the smaller and less thick, the more urgent the message will be.

Have a good one, Burns!

sloppy4's picture
sloppy4
1496 pencils

you too.

BOOBJOB LOOBCANNON's picture
BOOBJOB LOOBCANNON
1838 pencils

I second that. I like the ad a lot, but the line is not natural. Looks like a translation, but it isn't.

We're going to need more lube.

john doe's picture
john doe
1571 pencils

too constructed - too far-fetched

BOOBJOB LOOBCANNON's picture
BOOBJOB LOOBCANNON
1838 pencils

I like it. Was confused by Victoria, thinking it meant from the Victorian era, but I see it is from Victoria the place. Makes sense now. I like it.

Baloony

We're going to need more lube.

jazarah's picture
jazarah
1262 pencils

not bad

poojagadodia's picture
poojagadodia
194 pencils

http://www.watgame.com
its not attractive ...might not hold the attention.....good but could be better...:)

Salet's picture
Salet
288 pencils

The idea is great. I don't agree with the art form and think the copywriter should have spent a few more hours on the line, but again, great idea.

Note it now that you'll see this idea again, executed better, probably for water deprived orphans or something.

copywriter_n's picture
copywriter_n
52 pencils

the line didn't really get me to the point...
but the idea's good, took me a while to get it

FlyingDogs's picture
FlyingDogs
968 pencils

Lovely!

Rog's picture
Rog
6094 pencils

Speaks to Australians (living in that particularly dry part of Oz) bewdifully.
Rest of yous drongos, rack off! ;)

>>>> That's not an ad. THIS is an ad.

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