guys pls giv feedback as usual!

weighter's picture
Activity Score 744

I think your handle on the english language may be limiting you on these. Seems like there may be a well crafted floww to your thoughts however the words aren't getting it across to us.

ellehcimeo's picture
Activity Score 3516

you could use different boot treads for each execution. i'm certain that a cycling/mountain biking shoe looks different than a climbing shoe and also different from a snowboarding boot.
the font is really hard to read, especially since it's mostly all caps.

Guilherme Bill Luz's picture
Guilherme Bill Luz
Activity Score 202

terrible font...hard to read

adabortion's picture
Activity Score 615

weighter is right. Seems like the more you try to sound deep on your copy, the more shallow your ad translates. I suggest you keep your copy simple yet when your audience combine it with your visual, they'd see the thrid dimension to it. Relook the typography.

drain bamaged's picture
drain bamaged
Activity Score 34

pls dont try so hard on ur copy, its not a president's speech. n d word 'perform' seems a misfit 4 woodland, culd b more apt 4 nike n likes.
pls take a crash course on fonts.

Modal Writer's picture
Modal Writer
Activity Score 333

harping on the font man, switch it out and use less words (this from a copywriter?)

chintan ruparel's picture
chintan ruparel
Activity Score 1516

yes, this is from a copywriter... and i'm only trying to improve. i never defend my ads, ideas or stuff on this site and always take all the criticism seriously. i work hard on doing better each time; and to be fair, this seems better to me than some of my previous work. i know this may not go down too well with some of you guys, but the copy isnt tht bad... c'mon, its better than my earlier attempts. i agree the font may be a blunder. bt terming this as a president's speech is taking it a bit too far, no?

neways, thanks for all your comments and suggestions... keep 'em coming :)

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Modal Writer's picture
Modal Writer
Activity Score 333

haha, no man, i meant i was a copywriter (not usually prone to wanting less words), and no, the copy isn't that bad, but if it's going to be long (i.e. not just a headline) it had better be brilliantly written. So keep editing and take out everything that doesn't hit you right in the brainpiece.

Kamikaze's picture
Activity Score 716

Hi! Chints... i really like the thought... but its not coming across that well... try being simple...


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AdDavid's picture
Activity Score 406

the copy, the harder u work on it the better it gets. i guess u've already started. people here push ideas or thoughts that can be persued, otherwise they ask us to drop it. so if guys r asking to work on them, then it's just to make it better. cheer up!

chintan ruparel's picture
chintan ruparel
Activity Score 1516

thanx a lot guys 4 ur feedback... i guess i'll re-work both, the art & the copy a bit. ivan, i want ur feedback on this..try if u can..

~ old habits die hard, older ones never do ~