save tree.... again :)

seeing so many soulds trying to save trees here, I also want to do something :) OK, let's see.. few seconds browsing SXC, download a picture, 5 minutes browsing wikipedia for data, and less than 10 minutes of photoshop, here what I got...

(plus few seconds writing this message and uploading).

come on... shoot it (even you are just a guest ^_^ )

save tree.... again :)

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Ainadaliel's picture
Ainadaliel
271 pencils

I don't get it.

First off, the copy has so many grammatical errors.

Second, it looks like a forest fire is what killed the forest because of the match. Was the match supposed to be the "tree that didn't make it"?

stsanto's picture
stsanto
672 pencils

grammatical errors? I wonder. which part?

the match stick is "the tree that didn't make it". nothing with the fire.

Ainadaliel's picture
Ainadaliel
271 pencils

Grammatical errors as follows... copy also needs to be crafted some more.

Son, you will grow up so big and high--you don't grow UP to be BIG, you grow UP to be TALLER, hence the "up".

"higher than any TREES in the forest." It should just be "tree". If you wanted to use the plural form, you should have used "than any of the other trees."

"You will see a sunrise." There is only one sunrise, so it should be "the sunrise". It would also be consistent with how you wrote "the town, the hill, etc."

And it would also be nice if you used "the hill on the north, the town to the south, and the sunrise by your/the east, which sets at the west."

:D

stsanto's picture
stsanto
672 pencils

- how come I always heard mothers told theirs sons to grow up big and not tall?
- can't I use "any" with plural noun?
- I didn't write "a sunrise". HA! your mistake... :)

about copy... yeah.. I think this is too long, that's where the complexity comes. After doing that, was thinking perhaps should write "my mother told me I would grow up big like uncle sam, ...she didn't know you were coming"

oh well... it's never for making money anyway.. just play around with the popular topic ;)

How come no guests comment this one ? :)

ivan's picture
ivan

This ad has been overcomplicated. There is an idea somewhere, but it has too many layers. It hurts my head trying to resolve the thinking behind it. Try again. Make it simple.

Ivan Raszl, admin of AotW

stsanto's picture
stsanto
672 pencils

hehe... I guess I'm overacting here. Nah,.. not gonna try again, it was only killing spare time,.. well, perhaps when I'm less busy.

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